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October mists are shielding
All your horrors from my eyes,
But still I know that you are but
A demon in disguise,

Leaves are falling silently;
Catch them if you can,
They hit the ground in countries
Unseen by any man,

Yes, I chose to walk a path
Where you can't follow me,
October mists are fading you
Into what you must be.

What I write will be forgot,
But words in every day
Will tell the tales, however fast
My papers blow away,

October mists are calling me
To enter in their land,
A kingdom that is sleeping rests
In its creator's hand.

Night has spread her wings and so
No future yet is seen,
So do not dwell on things that were
And times that haven't been,

You could not go where freedom goes,
Where times and lifelines twist,
These lands of mine are veiling me
In cold October mist.
©2008-2009 ~janne-landet-poetry
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I was just made admin in my best friend's poetry/literature club, Words Words Words, over at Facebook. And please do come join us everyone, the more the merrier! There we're doing a poetry challenge with the theme October, so I wrote this poem for that.
It's more than anything a description of my October so far. Some people willfully seem to want to bring you down for some reason, and then it's good to know that there are places they can't follow you. Mentally as well as physically. At first glance, I realise that this might seem like a gloomy, melancholy, even negative poem, but that's not what I was thinking. I am also pondering new beginnings at the moment.

Janne

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This is very good. I dont think its all that depressing. I think it all depends on a person mood. Mood can either alter the message for the better or the worst. I didnt find it all that depressing (perhaps just a tad) but I picture the leaves in autumn. They fade in color & die but are eventually revive. :D Its just a segment in the whole circle of life. Spring & Autumn are my seasons. :) About half way down it seems to shoot a positive message. (the same as you said)

I always believe that death is the only way to be born afresh.

Again congrats on both your works & becoming the admin!

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Thanks! And thanks for all the great feedback, I really do appreciate it, poetry is ignored a lot at DA. So thanks. A bunch. :)

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Youre welcome! I assume that you really did cuz you took the time to even respond to my comments. :) I feel the same way also.

I feel like poetry is a dying art so I think its important to encourage those involve in it otherwise itll be lost. It seems like only poets understand other poets. Its a bit depressing to pour one heart in their work & not get notice for it.

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:heart:!

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:thanks:

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Yeah, that's true. Usually if you confide in someone that you write poetry, people give you this really strange look.

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;)

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